The World Awaits
Picture by Lisa L Weidemier
Source: Flickr
There once lived
a puppy named Tommy. He was the nicest, most hyper, and most curious little
puppy to exist. Tommy was ready to make new friends, and have an adventure into
the unknown.
Wow, the sun is
so bright, the trees are so green, and the clouds look like cotton candy! Tommy
was finally on his first ever adventure to the unknown world—the backyard!
Tommy looked at
something moving in the bushes. He was amazed, and a little scared. It had big
eyes, a fluffy tail, and long ears!
“I think I
should go talk to the fluffy little creature,” he said.
He kindly walked
over to the animal with a big tummy, and a cute little nose.
Tommy introduced
himself, and the animal said nothing. Tommy figured the big guy was having a
bad day, so he decided to leave, and come back later.
On his walk back
he ran into a slimy, scaly, with itty-bitty eyes. He’s never seen such a
creature. He introduced himself, and the creature hissed at him. Scared, he ran
back to his mother and told her everything!
She scolded
Tommy for talking to the bunny, but not the snake. The bunny’s name is Jim, and
he was known to be the meanest bunny in the entire neighborhood. He ate
everyone’s yummy vegetables, and hopped from home to home stealing carrots!
Little did Tommy know, this bunny was actually the nicest bunny of them all. He
took the carrots and vegetables to all the baby bunnies in the neighborhood
because they didn’t have a home, family, or a place to live.
Bibliography:
The Aesop's For Children's with illustration by Milo Winter, "The Cat the Cock, and the Young Mouse"
Author's Note:
The moral of this story was to teach kids to never judge people by their looks. The original story portrayed a mouse's adventure seeing the world for the first time. The mouse encounters a cock and a cat. At first, the mouse is frightened by both because he's never seen anything like a cat and a cock before. His mother tells the mouse that the cat is actually bad, and will eat him. He just looks "gentle." I wanted to portray the moral of the story in my own way by changing the characters, and intentionally putting a scar on the bunny to represent blemishes every individual has. "Never judge a book by it's cover" is a saying everyone is familiar with. Even adults make the mistake of judging someone by how he/she dresses, looks, and acts. In my story, the character that everyone thought was bad turns out to be good. This was just another reminder to "never judge a book by it's cover."
Wow Dhara I love your story! I totally didn't see the plot twist of the bunny being nice coming! I think you did a really good job setting him up as being mean in the beginning so it was a surprise! I understand the bunny was actually nice, but I couldn't figure out how everyone could have not ever witnessed his kind works for the other bunnies before, could you find a way to explain that? What if you elaborated more on how the snake was the "nice" one at first, since all he did was hiss? You could say he was the neighborhood baker who was giving out his free food or something like that when Tommy saw him! (Although it would be hard for a snake to hand things out..) I really loved your story and I think you did a really good job of bringing home the moral of the myth!!
ReplyDeleteHi Dhara! First off, I love how you told the story from the puppy's point of view! It was so cute, and I definitely put myself in his shoes! In your author's note, I loved how you said that the scar symbolizes blemishes that everyone has. That's so great! I also really liked the ending of the story, how Tommy even got his mom to help with the garden!
ReplyDeleteDharah, I like your story! I had read this story and liked how you changed the baby mouse into a puppy. I was curious on why the mother did not warn the puppy to stay away from the snake, maybe should could explain why or why not the snake is harmless. I like that the bunny is seen as mean but it is only because the other animals are judgmental of his actions instead of learning more about him. You could add in a little story of how the puppy learned that the bunny was actually helping all of the other baby bunnies get food. Great story!
ReplyDeleteHi Dhara, I really enjoyed your story! The picture you have at the beginning is too cute, I immediately already knew I’d love this story as soon as I saw it! I like the message that you were trying to convey and I read the original story so I loved seeing the difference between the original and your story. I like the fact that you decided to add a scar to the bunny to get the message across.
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ReplyDeleteThis is a really nice story! The picture is great for setting the scene. I think it would be nice if you added more information about the snake. Why did the mom want Tommy to talk to him? Was he really nice after all? I think you also left out a word in the sentence 'on his walk back..'
Hi Dhara, I really enjoyed your version of the story. I think you portrayed the puppy really well and the picture that goes along with it is adorable. You gave a good description of the animals and I could imagine it happening. Maybe add more information about the snake, because it doesn't relate to the story enough. I also like how the moral of the story was one that most everyone knows: "never judge a book by it's cover."
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